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please give this song a comment,thnx
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Old 03-17-2005, 01:08 PM
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http://www.geocities.com/gigadick2001/jangnara-i.mp3
it's coversong of koreanmusic
i like it so much i wrote english lyric forit
i like to hear review on lyric writing and wanna know whether there's a hiss or not on vocal track
for vocal i know it's a bit high,it's a girlsong but i have only myself to sing it
thnx
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Old 03-17-2005, 03:02 PM
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Old 03-17-2005, 06:36 PM
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cool man!! ace latin jazz feel. Loving the singing, although it would probably sound better with the original language. the lyrics are abit......odd - "i steal the tears from the world....and put them all on my face" lol sounds reall good though. like the fell of the music, got a cool groove to it. love the guitar and keys!
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Old 03-17-2005, 09:17 PM
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hi
thnx for all
Shredchild ,you can access this page
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/lovenara.htm
it was down yesterday so i didn't include it
Stimpus
million of thnx for constructive review
Is there any hiss in vocal track?
the guitarpatch is also a surprise for me
i use alesis QS8 for only piano, always thought the other sounds suck
suddenly this patch is a godsend for me in time i searcharound while tracking this song
for lyric
i thought jangnara,the original singer is an angel so i want to write sth special
LOL hope it doesn't make much mistake
thnx again
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Old 03-18-2005, 07:36 AM
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Yeah, cut the singing.. The base is really good! Add more instruments, for solo's etc.
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Old 03-18-2005, 08:39 AM
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konga - yeah piano patch is really good! but thats a guitar patch?!?! wow thats a good patch, sounds like a real guitar! i like it.

merijn - dunno about cutting the singing although it could use some work the song would get boring after a while, and it isn't that bad...lol
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Old 03-18-2005, 08:55 AM
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It's a great track, but a few things

1. The singing is...weak. Some notes are unsteady and others are plain wrong. Bottom line is that I can tell that you're not a singer by vocation and that's bad. You don't want people to think that. I'd suggest getting a professional singer to redo that track (the background vocals seem to be okay though).\
2. The main vocal track is too loud. Cut it by like 3-4 db's
3. Umm...give me money.

That's all I can think of actually. The vocal track is the only thing that bothered me. Great song though! Great patches, great composition, great playing. I really want to hear this with better vocals :)
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Old 03-18-2005, 06:37 PM
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Originally Posted by Stimpus
konga - yeah piano patch is really good! but thats a guitar patch?!?! wow thats a good patch, sounds like a real guitar! i like it.

merijn - dunno about cutting the singing although it could use some work the song would get boring after a while, and it isn't that bad...lol
It's not that the voice is bad, but the song simply doesn't need that. It's interesting enough to deal without it.
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Old 03-28-2005, 12:38 PM
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oh sorry can't answer the topic for few days
i had resung it please dload and hear again
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