song by me

[Timo]

hello all,

i wrote a song for my girlfriend and finally managed to record it. It's not really progressive rock, it's more something like britpop, but I'd be very pleased about some comments by you!
www.tfx.ch/stuff/music/moon.mp3
I know that my english and my vocals are really bad, sorry :oops:
thanks in advance for your critics/comments!

greetings,
timo

[SpaceDyeMan]

I liked it, your vocals sux just a litte :P
Your vocals are no good and no bad :)
The song is cool, maybe if a little more "worked" and shorter and with a real vocalist it could be a hit :)

just one thing: The moon don't give the light, it just reflects the light of the sun :P :lol:

Again congrats really good song! :wink:

What board were used?

[ung]

I agree with SpaceDyeMan the vocals needs more practise.

I think its an good song overall, but nothing that really caught my interest. If i were your girlfriend i would like to have something more cute :lol:

Well well, good song overall though.

[Timo]

Thanks for your comments, spacedyeman and ung.
I know that my vocals suck, I never sung a song myself before, but I wanted to sing this one because it would be a bit strange if someone else sings the words I wrote for her.
I used a Yamaha P90 for the piano parts and a triton pro for the rest.